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The three pie charts illustrate us the amount of hours spent in a british university library by undergraduates,postgraduates and the total student population

The three pie charts illustrate us the amount of hours spent in a british university library by undergraduates,postgraduates and the total student population
The three pie charts illustrate
us
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 the
amount
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 of
hours
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 spent in a
british
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 university
library
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 by
undergraduates
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,postgraduates and the total student population. It’s right that
proportion
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the proportion
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 of postgraduate
students
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 spent more
hours
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 in
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library
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the library
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 than
proportion
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the proportion
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 of
undergraduates
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 and other
students
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. In
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comparison
camparison
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 just over
one half
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one-half
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 of postgraduates spent over 15
and
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apply
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more
hours
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 than other average
students
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 spent.
Respiratively
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Respectively
 51 and
fifeteen
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fifteen
 per
cents
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cent
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.
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, only 17 per
cent
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 of
postgraduatesspent
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postgraduates spent
 in
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library
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the library
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under
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for under
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 eight
hours
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,
whereas
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 average
students
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 in
this
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 category
exactly
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are exactly
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 one half. Meanwhile, for
undergraduates
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the model appears to be
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similarly
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similar
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. Only a modest
thirty seven
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thirty-seven
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 per
cent
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 spent more
seven
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than seven
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hours
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, but of
this
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 total 9 per
cent
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 spent
fifeteen
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fifteen
 or more
hours
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 in
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library
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the library
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, which is almost
sixth
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a sixth
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 of the corresponding figure for postgraduates
students
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. But
undergraduates
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has
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have
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 first place in per
cent
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 which spent seven or
less
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fewer
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hours
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 with a hefty 63 per
cent
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, library, undergraduates, students, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrate" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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