Educating young people is naturally important. However, some think governments ought to invest more in education for adults in need. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is believed that youth is an asset for the country's development in the future,

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it is genuinely important to build the adolescent’s knowledge. In the meantime, there is some opinion that stands for the government needs to be focused on educating adults who need

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instead

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of the youth. From my perspective, I completely agree with the statement that we government need to invest more in elder

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consideration of my views.

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with, it needs to realize that

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of

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for adults could be low

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the limited access for them to pursue an

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particularly in the previous decade with a minimum facility from the country,

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in the rural area.

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, it leads them to the low

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for having a job that impacts their economy and they do not have enough money for their family. As an effect

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of

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situation, they even can not they cannot afford to send their children

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to school. It will make the cycle of poverty in the family

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and perpetuate/continue/persist.

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, if there is a public policy on enlarging the

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for

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access for the elderly.

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to develop soft skills

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as Reading, Basic Mathematics, and Basic Digital or Information Technology

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it will help them

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broaden their competencies and can give them new skills which can be used

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to apply for a job

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the

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to them will rise up because of the competencies that they have. Their life will be better than before, and they can

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their family’s primary needs because of the cash that they get from their jobs.

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policy

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can help to decrease the poverty number in the country. In conclusion, it is important for the government in investing the

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access to help them have a good life for their family and so on.

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for adults

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knowledge can impact the country’s development in the case of poverty as well.