In their advertising businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this do you think? Is it a positive or negative development?

Today businesses are
extremely
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common kind of activity
therefore
most businessmen do their best for clients
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them. They use
the
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blatant
way
of making their product popular - saying that
products
are new which, from my point of view, is
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appropriate
way
 of advertising.
Majority
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of people consider that new
products
have higher quality than the old ones. thereby
products
which are new in some
way
are, mostly in preference.
Hence
, businesses have an opportunity to leverage
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this
belief and increase their income.
For example
, in 2020, when Kylie Cosmetics experience a decline in purchases, staff started adding new useful components
in
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their
products
,
started
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and started
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creating new lines of decorative cosmetics in order to attract more clients. Mentioning new things about a product in advertisements should not be counted as a negative improvement. Because there is not something bad in informing people about
products
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product
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development if it is genuinely
become
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becoming
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newer.
Also
,
such
advertising
are
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really convenient for content-maker, for people who
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for
good's
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popularity. They do not have to wonder a lot about how
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product
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a product
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famous
,
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but can write about new elements in it, definitely. If they
exit
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exist
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in fact.
Furthermore
, businesses can attract more purchases and gain more money in a
way
which does not
to
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do
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any harm
for
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to
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clients.
That is
profitable and useful for either
business
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businesses
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 or buyers. In conclusion,
this
kind of
advertisments
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advertisement
are
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is
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very popular and it is explainable. It,
also
, cannot be considered
as
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apply
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a negative development as no one suffers from it, no one complains and it is normal in society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Emphasize
  • Novel(ty)
  • Consumer interest
  • Competitive advantage
  • Research and development (R&D)
  • Technological advancements
  • Innovation
  • Saturated market
  • Gimmick
  • Consumer disappointment
  • Brand trust
  • Expenditure
  • Sustainability
  • Upgrade
  • Waste
  • Long-term value
  • Engagement
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