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Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?

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One of the heated issues is there are
less
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students
 following
science
-related
subjects
 in university. Many people think that
this
 situation cannot
cause
 any negative effects.
However
, I do believe that the lack of
science
students
 might
cause
 severe consequences
on
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 society. In
this
 essay, I will give my own opinion on the reasons and causes of the shortage of
science
students
. There is no doubt that the number of
students
 choosing
science
 has decreased dramatically in recent years. There are many reasons for
this
. For one thing, many undergraduates found
science
-related
subjects
 difficult and not attractive enough. For another,
science
subjects
 taught in the current educational program are so impractical that undergraduates cannot apply what they learn in
real life
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 situations. The most familiar example of
this
 is that Vietnamese
students
 have to learn a lot of unrealistic knowledge that cannot help them much in their work.
On the other hand
, many
students
 having a great passion for
science
 may not have enough money to pay because of the high educational fee
in
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 university. It seems quite clear that these factors have a significant contribution to the decrease
of
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science
students
. It is well known that the shortage of undergraduates learning
science
 may
cause
 extreme effects on society. As many
students
 found
science
 unattractive,
students
 can easily get bored of
science
. The
science
subjects
 boredom is the main reason for the lack of
science
students
 which can lead to the shortage of
science
 workers in the future. Take Vietnam for an example, if
this
 situation keeps continuing, Vietnamese patients will have struggled with the decrease in the number of doctors in 50 years’ time. To address
this
 problem, the Vietnamese government has worked out many measures to attract more
students
 to choose to study
science
 at university. In a nutshell,
this
 problem must be tackled quickly. In conclusion, the decline in
science
-related
subjects
students
 can
cause
 terrible effects. Both governments and their citizens have to take action to address
this
 constructively.
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