Some people think that schools should give prizes for academic successes. Others argue that it is more important for schools to give prizes for other achievements (for example, for sports, music and behaviour). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A prize is an award form which encourages people, especially children, to gain
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success.
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, a group of
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believes that school heads should grant their students
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their academic results,
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others insist on the importance of honour for other achievements
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talent. Personally, I agree with
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discuss my point of view in the following paragraphs, including some examples from my own experience. In the first instance, it is argued that school-goers should be assigned for their scholastic successes,
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as international
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, steam olympiads, semi-final and final scores and etc. By awarding them, teachers
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may create enthusiasm towards
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it increases rivalry among youngsters.
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, in 2015 when I was studying
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university, the government set
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scholarship, about being able to study
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year in London, for winning
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competition with
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. Almost 80% of faculties had participated in the competition willingly.
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, adolescents may be encouraged to get
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of their lessons.
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, being talented in
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various fields,
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, music,
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and behaviour
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, should be appreciated, respectively. It is undeniable that
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a gifted musician or sportsman may represent his or her country in the international
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. To
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month, 7 students of our lyceum
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I work, had brought 7 gold,
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silver medals from
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competition, organized in France, to our country. The founder of
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organized
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ceremony and
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all the participants because of their initiatives. I believe that the number of competitors, who
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to take part in the international games, will have been increased.
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, with all of the examples that I have listed above, I believe that teenagers should be rewarded
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their personal ability, with the aim of creating
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environment to show capacity.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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