Some people believe that the best way to travel within a city is by car. Others believe it is best to travel by bicycle. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays, everyone has their personal
cars
and they
use
it
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them
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for transportation purposes. Even they need to go anywhere in the
city
. On
contrary
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the contrary
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, the
use
of
cycle
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cycles
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is getting declined. Some argue that, using
car
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the car
a car
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as
mode
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a mode
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of
transporation
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transportation
is best for travelling within
city
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the city
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. But, others argue cycling is
best
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the best
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option for travelling. I strongly believe that
,
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apply
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we should
use
bicycle
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bicycles
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for going anywhere within the
city
. And in
this
essay,
i
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I
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shall discuss its benefits as well. There are umpteen reasons to argue that
bycycle
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bicycles
is
best
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the best
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mode of transportation for
city
use
.
First,
cycling
improve
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improves
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physical fitness. So,
instead
of using
car
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the car
a car
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for going
anywhere
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,anywhere
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it is
good
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a good
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option to consider. And by using it you can achieve two tasks at once, you could reach
desired
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your desired
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destination and you do not need to spare some time for
excercise
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exercise
. Because
,
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bicycling is considered
as
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a
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good physical
excersion
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excursion
exertion
for cardio.
Furthermore
, there are pressing issues of
pollution
such
as, air
pollution
is increasing, because of burning
fosil
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fossil
fuel for running
cars
. So,
instead
of burning fuel for one individual,
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a bycycle
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bycycle
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bicycle
is
best
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the best
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alternative.
Bycycle
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Bicycle
does not
required
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require
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any fuel,
therefore
, there will be no air
pollution
.
Also
, it is cheap so, it is beneficial for
pocket
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the pocket
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.
Moreover
, too many
cars
can
required
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require
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parking facilities and sometimes people park their
cars
on
roadside
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the roadside
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. And that will create traffic congestion.
On the other hand
,
cycle
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the cycle
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does not
required
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require
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any of these, it can be fit in
small
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a small
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space as well. To recapitulate,
ofcourse
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of course
,
cars
provide
convinience
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convenience
to people
while
travelling and
it
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they
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can be used for
longer
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a longer
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journey
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journeys
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. But,
to go
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going
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around
city
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the city
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area,
it
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apply
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is not
viable
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a viable
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option. So,
to reduce
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reducing
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level
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the level
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of
pollution
and congestion in cities
bycycle
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bicycle
is more efficient.
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