Despite the benefits for health, fewer people today than ever before exercise by walking. Why is this? What can be done to encourage more walking?

It is true that walking is very good for health.
Exercise
not only aids in the development of a decent physique but
also
enhances the body’s metabolism.
Nevertheless
,
many
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people
today than ever before don’t continue, they even stop it. I will give some causes and solutions to cheer that issue. On the one hand, the
firt
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first
reason for reducing walking
exercise
amongst
people
is
easy
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availability of transportation. Nowadays, everyone
use
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conveyance to do a
lot
of things in their life and it
also
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very easy to find. So
people
usually
use
it
instead
of walking. It’s quite convenient and fast to move.
People
won’t feel tired and bored when they want to go somewhere. But
people
around the
world
use
them a
lot
, they can impact on environment negatively
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can make our
world
have more emissions and production from burning fossil. They make us worry about when we
use
it
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. the second occasion is the heat of the
world
is increasing and weather conditions are becoming hot and humid that make them don’t want to go out, they feel very shy when they see it so they expand using transportation to transfer. The weather can
up
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to 40 degrees which
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them can’t go away because that level will influence
in
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health. That
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a
lot
of skin infections.
On the other hand
, measures that can be taken to promote walking
exercise
is
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health-awareness campaigns.
Goverment
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should have many
solves
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for that problems, they should organise a
lot
of activities to encourage
people
. They
also
have
explanation
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explanations
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about the importance of walking that make
people
become to know clearly. States
also
have many resolutions to decrease moveable
transports
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. If they can apply it
succesfully
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successfully
, they can reduce many bad elements and contribute to
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a clean and safe environment.
People
also
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aware of
changing
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in
walking
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routine. They should do more
excercise
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exercise
because it
help
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them have
a
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apply
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good health and
body
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that
is
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everyone like. Doing
exercise
also
make
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them create a habit. That
make
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them always ready to go and never feel timid.
Goverment
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Government
also
create
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a
lot
of activities that
people
can join and receive many rewards.
People
can be motivated
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that. it’s very good to create a healthy
world
. In conclusion, there are a number of reasons why individuals have halted walking workouts. Effective methods,
on the other hand
, can
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assist
people
in resuming walking. We
together with
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government
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goverment
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government
should
a
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lot
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keys to combine and answer that problem
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