Despite the benefits for health, fewer people today than ever before exercise by walking. Why is this? What can be done to encourage more walking?

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It is true that walking is very good for health.

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not only aids in the development of a decent physique but

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enhances the body’s metabolism.

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people

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today than ever before don’t continue, they even stop it. I will give some causes and solutions to cheer that issue. On the one hand, the

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reason for reducing walking

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amongst

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availability of transportation. Nowadays, everyone

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use

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conveyance to do a

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of things in their life and it

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also

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very easy to find. So

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usually

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instead

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of walking. It’s quite convenient and fast to move.

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won’t feel tired and bored when they want to go somewhere. But

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around the

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, they can impact on environment negatively

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can make our

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have more emissions and production from burning fossil. They make us worry about when we

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. the second occasion is the heat of the

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is increasing and weather conditions are becoming hot and humid that make them don’t want to go out, they feel very shy when they see it so they expand using transportation to transfer. The weather can

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to 40 degrees which

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them can’t go away because that level will influence

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health. That

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of skin infections.

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, measures that can be taken to promote walking

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health-awareness campaigns.

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for that problems, they should organise a

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of activities to encourage

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. They

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have

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about the importance of walking that make

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become to know clearly. States

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have many resolutions to decrease moveable

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. If they can apply it

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, they can reduce many bad elements and contribute to

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a clean and safe environment.

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also

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aware of

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walking

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routine. They should do more

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because it

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them have

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good health and

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everyone like. Doing

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them create a habit. That

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them always ready to go and never feel timid.

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create

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lot

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of activities that

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can join and receive many rewards.

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can be motivated

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that. it’s very good to create a healthy

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. In conclusion, there are a number of reasons why individuals have halted walking workouts. Effective methods,

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, can

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assist

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in resuming walking. We

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Despite the benefits for health, fewer people today than ever before exercise by walking. Why is this? What can be done to encourage more walking?

Fully explain your ideas

Health services are a basic necessity. However private companies have made them quite costly foe ordinary individuals. Do the advantages of private health care outweighs it's disadvantages

Many think that religion should be taught in schools while others think it should be avoided. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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Some people think that the range of technology currently available is increasing the gap between rich people and poor people. Others think that it is causing the opposite effect. Discuss both views and give your opinion.