The charts below show the results of a survey of the primary exercise objectives and locations of a selected group of adults between 20 and 50 years of age.
The two pie charts illustrate what makes people happy between 20 and 50 years of age. It is clear from these two charts that there are different rates in five exercises and the achievement of work is the same in both pies and it is the highest percentage in both ages between 32% and 31%.
Looking in more detail, the
rate
of other factors of adults under 30 is less rate
than the other exercises by 14%. After that, the rate
of travel increased by about 1 % than other factors. What is more, having a good appearance rises to 18%, and doing hobbies also
slightly grows to 22%.
Moreover
, the percentage of other factors for people over 30 is less around about 10%. Then
, being with a family rate
go up to 14%, and also
doing hobbies rapidly grow to 24%. On the other hand
, the rate
of financial security exercises slightly drops to 20% for doing hobbies.Submitted by m on
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