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Human beings are being judged according to their social status and marterial possession. Old fashioned values such as kindness and trust seems no longer important. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Position in society and
money
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 orientation are the factors by which one judges individuals
instead
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 of kind nature and honesty which are ignored as important.
Although
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such
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 a situation is happening in
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 world, traditional values are respected to make a judgement about
someone
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. In a materialistic society,
people
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 respect those who have a higher
status
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 and
money
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. If
someone
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 is living a richer lifestyle, she will be judged as a great
person
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 and respected by others. When making a friend or choosing a life partner, undoubtedly, human beings check one's
status
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 first in order to live in a better community. What is more, opportunities which are allocated to humans by lawmakers, often go to those who are in any power
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 their
status
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.
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,
people
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 live with them so that they can take some benefits despite those
people
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 who are kind to them material possession and social
status
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 have performed influence on
people
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. Paradoxically, as social animals,
people
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 seek a
person
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 who is helpful and trustworthy to share time with in
this
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 fast-paced world. Since everyone lures for
money
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 and has to work hard to earn which leads to busy and stressful life,
people
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 want a loyal partner to live with.
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, they check humans' hearts ,not their
money
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. They give value to their trust and kindness.
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, these are the traits of humans which are highly respected to judge the personality of
someone
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. The Minister of India,
for example
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, is considered a great
person
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 ,not because of his position only
because
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 mainly his politeness.
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, a judgement of
someone
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 can remain incomplete unless one checks the other's nature. In conclusion, it has become a trend to judge a
person
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 by noticing his
status
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,
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nevertheless
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 kind nature and loyalty are valued significantly.
People
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 are likely to identify
someone
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 by his possessions,
,
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however
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 they can hardly ignore the importance of old-fashioned values.

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