The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
This
graph looks at the volume of fast
food
consumption from 1970 to 1990. Tree
category
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of junk
food
are presented here.
Firstly
, the upward trend can be seen for hamburgers and fish and chips samples during the 20
years
.
Whereas
the mass of pizza
consumpts
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consumption
per week decreases in the first fifteen
years
, and
then
slightly increases from
the
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1985 to 1990. The presented graph
indicate
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the contrast
of
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the consumption
junk
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food
.
For example
, the amount of hamburgers becomes more than sixth as many in twenty
years
.
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Furthermore
,
the
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similar picture can be observed for the fish and
ships
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chips
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category,
this
sample rose more than
on
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five times.
Above all
,
this
type is much more popular in 1990 compared to others - the
consuption
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consumption
is about 500 grams per week. To summarize, the average amount of fast
food
has risen through all these
years
.
In addition
, the most unpopular type of
food
in 1990 is pizza, but in
the
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1970 it has
the
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advance
above all
others.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "above all".
Vocabulary: Replace the words food, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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