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Band 3.5

Some people think that government should be held responsible when problem of homelessness snd unemployment arise.Do you agree or disagree

Some
people
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 think that the problems are
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the responsability
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responsability
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responsibility
 of the government and that
this
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sould
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should
could
 be resolved for
this
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. At the moment the planet is in crisis
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while
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apply
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we can see how the war in Ucrania generates inflation in all the countries and with
these more unemployment
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this more unemployment
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.
Firstly
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, somebody think that each person is who
decide
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decides
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their for
his for
her for
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for
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or
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yours
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their
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 own way and how to walk
of
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off
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 the pounds of
the
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apply
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life.
However
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, there
is
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are
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 factors that can
infuence
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influence
 in our commodities ,
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, when there is
not
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no
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stock
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the stock
a stock
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 of
foods
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food
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 or goods, exist a lot of
varity
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variety
 of troubles that can urge in a town.
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this
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 is not
impediment
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an impediment
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 for makes us
responsable
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responsible
of
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for
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ours
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our
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reality
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a reality
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. On another hand, there
is
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are
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people
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 who are not
answer
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the answer
an answer
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of
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to
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 the
goverment
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government
. The help is
neccesary
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necessary
 in
much
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many
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 of cases
that
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where
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people
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not be
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are not
were not
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 able to respond for
themselfs
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themselves
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. Homelessness is
a
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an
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 issue that
sould
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should
could
 be
trated
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treated
traded
due to
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is
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apply
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a point that concerns
to
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apply
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accurate
people
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. The
taxs
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taxes
tax
 have been created for manages the quality of life and make
more easy
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easier
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 the problems that the persons have
.
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more.
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 In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 I agree
on
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with
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 the sense of each individual is who
direcction
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direction
 his life. I am sure that god gives us tools
for
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to
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be
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being
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 able
of
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to
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 decide in spite of
difficults
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difficulties
difficulty
 that can arise
in
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along
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 the way but
this
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not
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does not
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 leave
of
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apply
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side
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aside
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 the
responsability
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responsibility
 of government. I believe that both postures have reason in one point but more the first.

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