(Livia) Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague who is leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter – Suggest a suitable date and time for the party – Recommend a venue – Propose the food and entertainment options that should be available.

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Dear Paul, I am writing regarding Emily’s goodbye party. As you

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me to organize the celebration, I would like to share with you the deals I have been making. First of all, I talked with the team, including Emily, and the best day to do it will be on Friday, September 21st, at 3:30 PM. I decided

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specific time to enjoy the party for around 2 hours until we

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at 6:00PM. I have had check if the barbecue room of our office complex, the space is spectacular and supports around 20 people, and is available for us! We are a lucky guys.

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it will happens around dinner time, I have been thinking to order pizzas at Dominos, as they have the best pizza of Atlanta city. I

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considered some tortillas with guacamole and bevarages

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as soda and beers.

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, Emily is going to Texas, so I got in touch with a country singer and arranged with him. If you have any suggestions for

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kind celebration, please reach me back through

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email. I will be happy to consider it. Best regards, Livia

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task response

Ensure to fully address all points mentioned in the prompt. Provide more details and explanations regarding the venue, food, and entertainment options. Make sure to suggest a clear and suitable date and time for the party.

coherence and cohesion

Improve the organization of ideas by separating each idea into paragraphs. Use transition words and phrases to create a smoother flow between sentences and ideas. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

190 words

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(Livia) Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague who is leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter – Suggest a suitable date and time for the party – Recommend a venue – Propose the food and entertainment options that should be available.

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is important for people to take risks, both in their professional lives and their personal lives. Do you think the advantages of taking risks outweigh the disadvantages?