(Livia) Your manager has asked you to arrange a party for a colleague who is leaving the company. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter – Suggest a suitable date and time for the party – Recommend a venue – Propose the food and entertainment options that should be available.

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Dear Paul, I am writing regarding Emily’s goodbye party. As you

request

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me to organize the celebration, I would like to share with you the deals I have been making. First of all, I talked with the team, including Emily, and the best day to do it will be on Friday, September 21st, at 3:30 PM. I decided

this

specific time to enjoy the party for around 2 hours until we

leave

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at 6:00PM. I have had check if the barbecue room of our office complex, the space is spectacular and supports around 20 people, and is available for us! We are a lucky guys.

Due to

it will happens around dinner time, I have been thinking to order pizzas at Dominos, as they have the best pizza of Atlanta city. I

also

considered some tortillas with guacamole and bevarages

such

as soda and beers.

Therefore

, Emily is going to Texas, so I got in touch with a country singer and arranged with him. If you have any suggestions for

this

kind celebration, please reach me back through

this

email. I will be happy to consider it. Best regards, Livia

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task response

Ensure to fully address all points mentioned in the prompt. Provide more details and explanations regarding the venue, food, and entertainment options. Make sure to suggest a clear and suitable date and time for the party.

coherence and cohesion

Improve the organization of ideas by separating each idea into paragraphs. Use transition words and phrases to create a smoother flow between sentences and ideas. Ensure that each paragraph focuses on a single main idea.

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5Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

190 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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