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Employers sometimes ask people applying for jobs for personal information, such as their hobbies and interests whether they are married or single. Some people say that this information may be relevant and useful. Others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that
people
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 applying for work are asked for personal data like their sporting activities, interests and marital status.
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, some believe that it is not necessary to ask for
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 details. In my own opinion, I strongly believe that it is a good idea to ask for
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 information before employing
people
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. On the
one
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 hand, I agree that business owners should ask for hobbies and marital status from their interviewees because
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 information allows the employers to know the characters of the
people
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 they are going to employ.
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, if a
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 needs someone to use a bicycle to deliver newspapers so it is wise to employ
one
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 who is interested in riding a bicycle and working outdoors.
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, it is argued that if the employer gets to know the marital status of an interviewee they will be able to get a suitable candidate for the work if they require someone who is not married.
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, employing a person who is single is best for the
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 if there is a need to relocate, it is cheap for
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 person without a family to move from
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 city to another without any hustle unlike if married would need to move with family and it is so inconveniencing to the
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.
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, taking personal data from
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 during interviews can be irrelevant because
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 kind of selection can disadvantage a
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 by losing the right person.
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, the interviewee might be qualified for the work but because their hobbies do not align with the
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`s interests they will not get the post. In conclusion, I totally believe that asking for personal data is actually necessary because the
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 will employ the right fit for the position and
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 it is easy for a
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 to make correct decisions if they need to take someone single for the job.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • job application
  • personal information
  • hobbies and interests
  • marital status
  • relevant
  • useful
  • privacy
  • assessing candidates
  • qualifications
  • experience
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