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The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full time work did after leaving college in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar charts illustrate how graduate and postgraduate
students
Use synonyms
 decided to do after finishing college in the UK in 2008.
Overall
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, the number of
students
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 choosing
further
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 study was the consistently highest in both two given types of
students
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,
while
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 the constantly lowest number of graduate and postgraduate
students
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 did voluntary activities.
In addition
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, the majority of graduate
students
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 did not go into full-time jobs. In terms of graduates, the highest figure was a supplement study with 29,665
students
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, followed by 17,735 who chose part-time jobs.
Similarly
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, but to a lesser extent, the number of
students
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unemployed after leaving college accounted for 16,235 units. The least amount of after-school activity was voluntary tasks with 3,500
students
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. UK postgraduates who do part-time work and
further
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 study were at 2535 and 2725 respectively, which were the biggest numbers in 2008.
Conversely
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, unemployment was considerably higher than voluntary effort, in which 1625 postgraduate
students
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 were unemployed and only 345 ones do voluntary work.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • academic pursuit
  • temporary employment
  • voluntary work
  • further studies
  • part-time work
  • full-time employment
  • data representation
  • statistical comparison
  • post-educational paths
  • job market
  • unemployment rate
  • career advancement
  • skill development
  • lifelong learning
  • employment sector
  • vocational training
  • economic trends
  • workforce participation
  • career aspirations
  • higher education
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