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The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.

The graph gives information about the consumption of fast food (in grams per week), in the UK from 1970 to 1990.
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The line graph illustrates the average of fast food
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 as hamburgers, fish and chips and pizza in the Uk from 1970 to 1990 per week. 
Overall
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, It is clear from
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 graph that the consumption of fish and chips was
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higher rate in 1990 by around 500 than other fast food,
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 the consumption of hamburgers was
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lower rate in 1970 by 10. Looking at the chart for more detail, the rate of pizza slightly dropped from 1970 to 1985 from 300 to 200.
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, it slowly increased from 200 to 210. What is more, the consumption of fish and chips suddenly rose from 150 to 500 from 1980 to 1990. What is more, from 1970 to 1985, the average of hamburgers slowly increased to around 95.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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