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The course director of your previous college has invited you to attend a party for new students, and he has also asked you to give a talk about studying overseas. You have an important examination on the same day so you cannot attend the party. Write a letter to the director to apologize and to explain why you cannot attend the event. Suggest another date when you could give Your talk.

Dear
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, Hope you are doing well, I am writing
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 letter to inform you that I will not be
unable
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able to
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 attend the party you have invited me
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. Actually, I have an important exam on the same date that I can not miss.
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, I appreciate
you
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for
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inviting me as a speaker to provide information regarding foreign studies. As everyone has an idea about today's competitive
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 every single person wants a better job,
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that
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students should prefer to study in developed countries in order to
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a
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good experience for their professional life. Unfortunately, I'm not available that day, so
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 my humble
request to
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you
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if
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 you
can
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change the date
of
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the
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. It would be great to see you again.
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,
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 will be a good idea to attend the event and provide students with the information and motivation they need. Looking forward to your positive response. Best Regards, Ali

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