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In the 21st century, many women have come out of their home to become what we call working women. What are the advantages and disadvantages of women joining to workforce?

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a huge change, both of man and women have the same rights in
work
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the disadvantage over the advantages , In my, essay I will explore both views .
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 a lot of an opportunity for
woman
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nursing ,which can't male do
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,for ,example Arabic countries the school's girls are only
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woman
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 in family expenses. On another hand, their many disadvantages
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 of female
work
 there are many impacts related to that like the influence on children , instance the kids spend a lota lot time without the mother it could leave a will impact on them ,in both said psychology , and
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and sometimes letting in the study .Another reason that makes a
woman
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gander some
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workers need strong leadership
for example
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