the graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK.

the graph below shows the changing patterns of access to modern technology in homes in the UK.
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The graph provides information regarding the patterns, which changed
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the availability of new technologies in homes in the UK. The rate of all four modern devices increased over a 14-year period starting in 1994. In 1994, about 48 per
cent
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of homes had access to a CD player.
This
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figure rose slightly over the years to reach 90 per
cent
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in 2004. There was a little change in percentage after that. As regards the rate of mobile phones, it has experienced a gradual increase to nearly 80 per
cent
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in 2004, which was the second rank in terms of the highest percentage in houses. After that,
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figure slumped until 2008. Turning to houses with Internet connections, the proportion rose slightly from 10 per
cent
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in 1998 to just over 70 per
cent
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in 2008. No figures are given for DVD players before 2002. The percentage of accessibility to DVD players went up dramatically over a 6-year period ending in 2008.
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