The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.

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The given bar graph indicates the different amounts of renewable

energy

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overall

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energy

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supply in 4 countries in the year 1997, 2000 and 2010. The highest amounts of renewable

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have been observed in Iceland

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the period from 1997 to 2010, in which the total

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supplies

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peaked in 2010 followed by Turkey reaching a maximum level of

energy

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supply in 2000. The least

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energy

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Australia

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and Turkey have been observed in 2010. Sweden and Iceland have seen an increase in

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renewable

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levels

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from 1997 to 2010.

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, the

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have declined in

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since

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1997 to 2010.

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and Sweden have experienced a completely opposite trend with

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renewable

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levels

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from 1997 to 2010. Both,

Australia

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and Sweden have not crossed a total

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supply of 10 from 1997 to 2010.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, levels, australia with synonyms.

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The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.

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