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The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.

The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.
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The given bar graph indicates the different amounts of renewable
energy
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overall
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energy
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 supply in 4 countries in the year 1997, 2000 and 2010. The highest amounts of renewable
energy
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 have been observed in Iceland
throught
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through
throughout
 the period from 1997 to 2010, in which the total
energy
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 supplies
have
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peaked in 2010 followed by Turkey reaching a maximum level of
energy
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 supply in 2000. The least
levels
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 of
energy
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 in
Australia
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 and Turkey have been observed in 2010. Sweden and Iceland have seen an increase in
the
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renewable
energy
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levels
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 from 1997 to 2010.
whereas
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, the
levels
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 have declined in
Australia
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since
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from
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 1997 to 2010.
Australia
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 and Sweden have experienced a completely opposite trend with
the
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renewable
energy
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levels
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 from 1997 to 2010. Both,
Australia
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 and Sweden have not crossed a total
energy
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 supply of 10 from 1997 to 2010.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, levels, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amounts" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proportion
  • renewable energy
  • total energy supply
  • percentage
  • overall
  • changed
  • increases
  • decreases
  • fluctuating
  • trend
  • highest
  • lowest
  • significant
  • commitment
  • sustainability
  • environmental protection
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