The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.

The chart shows the proportion of renewable energy in total energy supply in 4 countries from 1997 to 2010.
The given bar graph indicates the different amounts of renewable
energy
in
overall
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energy
supply in 4 countries in the year 1997, 2000 and 2010. The highest amounts of renewable
energy
have been observed in Iceland
throught
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through
throughout
the period from 1997 to 2010, in which the total
energy
supplies
have
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peaked in 2010 followed by Turkey reaching a maximum level of
energy
supply in 2000. The least
levels
of
energy
in
Australia
and Turkey have been observed in 2010. Sweden and Iceland have seen an increase in
the
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renewable
energy
levels
from 1997 to 2010.
whereas
, the
levels
have declined in
Australia
since
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1997 to 2010.
Australia
and Sweden have experienced a completely opposite trend with
the
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renewable
energy
levels
from 1997 to 2010. Both,
Australia
and Sweden have not crossed a total
energy
supply of 10 from 1997 to 2010.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, levels, australia with synonyms.
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  • proportion
  • renewable energy
  • total energy supply
  • percentage
  • overall
  • changed
  • increases
  • decreases
  • fluctuating
  • trend
  • highest
  • lowest
  • significant
  • commitment
  • sustainability
  • environmental protection
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