The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates how bees produce honey. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram below shows the most important seven stages of producing
honey
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by
bees
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. It begins
by
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the
bees
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building a hive and
then
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finishes when the
honey
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is ready to be collected and used.
Firstly
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, the
bees
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build a container it’s the place where the
bees
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live, and it’s called a hive.
Secondly
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, the
bees
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the
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flowers. When they find a suitable flower, they start collecting the sweet liquid produced by flowers which is used to make the
honey
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, it’s called nectar. The
bees
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take the nectar back to the hive where the process starts.
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, they put it into the cells.
Then
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the
bees
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fan the nectar
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their wings, so it becomes cooler.
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the water loses its water and
turn
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to become a gas in a process called water evaporation.
As a result
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, the
honey
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is produced and ready to be collected and used after seven stages.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "firstly".
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words honey, bees with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Metamorphosis
  • Nectar
  • Foraging
  • Pollination
  • Worker bees
  • House bees
  • Honey stomach
  • Honeycomb cells
  • Beeswax
  • Evaporation
  • Hexagon-shaped
  • Simple sugars
  • Enzymes
  • Capping
  • Preserve
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