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In many countries, foreign labor is an important part of the economy. Using migrant labor can contribute to the development of a country, but it can also cause economic problems. What are some of the advantages and drawbacks of expatriate labor for a country’s economy?

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In modern human society, the majority of citizens share the same thought that possessing a house or an apartment is beneficial for our daily lives. As, in my perspective, it yields more benefits to most
people
 which will be discussed in the following essay. First of all, whether you have
an
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 own home, you won’t have to worry about paying rent monthly or annually. So, without that paying, you can use the money for
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,
such
 as saving for the future, investing in your business, or enjoying life and
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 care of yourself. Second of all, the reason why
people
 prefer possessing an accommodation to renting it
that is
 because they will be able to design their own house or decorate their apartment. Some
people
,
on the other hand
, consider their home as an investment which they expect to appreciate in value in the future.
However
, in order to own a home,
people
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 can get one more easily than
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others who loan a huge amount of money from a bank. These
people
 have to end up repaying the quantity over a very long time.
This
 raises the interest they have to pay.
Moreover
, the electricity and maintenance costs get added to their everyday expenses. All in all, it is extremely crucial for everyone to have
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ownership of an accommodation, as it is proved to be far more beneficial in
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 term even if we have adversaries to overcome.
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