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The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal berween 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal berween 1967 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The provided line graph illustrates how much carbon dioxide (CO2) was emitted per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal over 40 years period from 1967 to 2007. Units are measured in metric tonnes.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that
while
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 the
two
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 countries with the highest level of
emissions
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 at the start decreased moderately, the
two
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 countries with the lowest amount of production increased significantly.
As a result
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,
although
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 the United Kingdom remained the most producer of CO2 throughout the given period, the gap between the highest and lowest was smaller
at the end
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. In terms of the
two
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 nations with high levels of
emissions
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 in 1967, the UK was the first rank which accounted for 11 in 1967,
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however
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 the figure experienced a steady fall over 40 years to the end at under 10.
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, Sweden started at over 8, and even though reached its peak at 10 in 1977, it
then
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 fell significantly to the end at approximately under 6. Regarding the
two
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 countries with the low levels at the start, in 1967, the figures for both Italy and Portugal were far lower than the UK starting at above 4 and below 2, respectively. In the following 30
years
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 the production of
emissions
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 in Italy grew dramatically to almost 8,
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 exceeding that of Sweden.
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, the figure for Portugal climbed noticeably by roughly 4. After that, the amount of
emissions
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 for both Italy and Portugal experienced a steady remain until 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, emissions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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