IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 4.5

Average monthly change in price of copper, nickel and zinc in 2014

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The given line graph the average of three different metals changed in price during 2014. The amount applied was measured in the percentage of the previous month
Overall
Linking Words
 income be seen apply there are
two
Use synonyms
 line graphs illustrating the decrease: Copper and zinc. The left one was increased in nickel. Looking at the figure in
further
Linking Words
 detail, it is evident that the nickel was the biggest change in January, with a money price compared of roughly 6%. The next month, it is the biggest fluctuated chance between 4% and 0.5%,
then
Linking Words
 carried on decrease at -3%. Three months later, the figure did not remain unchanged at -1% and stabilized at 1% in the
last
Linking Words
two
Use synonyms
 months
at the end
Linking Words
 of the year. Turning
two
Use synonyms
 the remaining statistics, the changing of
two
Use synonyms
 left metals went up very differently. Regarding copper and zinc, their January figure was a significant difference at 1% and 2%. The former experience to declined apply four months later. Until July, the
two
Use synonyms
 metals stayed the same at 1%. Much like nickel, zinc ended the year with the highest change of approximately 2%.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: