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some peolpe think that woman should not be allowed to work in the police force. Do you agree or disagree?

#peolpe #woman #work #police #force
Many people are of the opinion that
female
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 must not employ to be as
police
 officers. Personally, I disagree with
this
 point of view and will highlight the reasons why in the following essay. It is vital to understand that
woman
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 can do a dangerous job as the
police
.
This
 is because, presently, female and male have equality , everything
are
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 fair in life,
work
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and work
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 ;
no
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not
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male-domated
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male-dominated
.
Moreoverm
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Moreover
woman
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women
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 are more careful and have better reasoning skills.
For example
,
woman
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women
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work
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 to be
as
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police
 can be more friendly and
patiently
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 to help children lose their parents than male. Another point worth
consideration
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 is that
female
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females
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 should not be permitted to employ
in
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as
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police
 officers.
As a result
, the charity of
female
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females
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 is weaker than
male
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males
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.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, some crime is
a
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apply
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men
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 that they have strong
violent
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violence
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 so some
woman
police
 maybe can not prevent themselves from crimes lead to
an
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 bad necessary.
To sum up
 , in my
opinion
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woman
 can be allowed to
work
 in the
police
 force because many women
is
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are
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 smart, astute,
have
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and have
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qualification
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the qualification
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 to
work
police
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policy
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. If they
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are worth
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worth
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itworth
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, people have to
equality
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have equality
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 with them.
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