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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian households. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which resukt from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting snd reposrting the kain features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian households. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which resukt from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting snd reposrting the kain features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of
Australian
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 families
consume
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that consume
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energy
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 for several appliances and the greenhouse
gas
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 emissions
result
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that result
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 from
this
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energy
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use
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.
Overall
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, it can be
cearly
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clearly
 seen that
Australian
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 households
use
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 the most
energy
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 for heating and
water
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 heating, and the highest
greenhoouse
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greenhouse
 effect from
the
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apply
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energy
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 usage is
water
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 heating. Looking at the information in more detail, 42% and 30%
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energy
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of energy
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used
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were used
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 for heating and
water
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 heating respectively. These usages contribute to the highest greenhouse
gas
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emission
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 with 32% of
gas
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emission
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emissions
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 from
water
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 heating,
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while
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and
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 15% from heating.
At
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With
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 regards to
the
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apply
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refrigerator usage, it
ccontribtes
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contributes
 to
doubled
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double
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emission
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emissions
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 where 7%
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Australian
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of Australian
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 families consume
energy
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 for
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 and 14% produce
gas
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emission
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emissions
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 from
this
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energy
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use
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.
The
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A
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 small proportion of
Australian
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 households used
energy
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 for cooling and lighting at only 2% and 4% respectively and these figures
also
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 contribute to 3% and 8% of
gas
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 emissions. 15% of
Austalian
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Australia
use
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energy
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 for other appliances and
this
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 usage
release
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releases
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 28% of
gas
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 emissions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, energy, gas, use, water, emission with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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