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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian households. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which resukt from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting snd reposrting the kain features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian households. the second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which resukt from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting snd reposrting the kain features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts illustrate the percentage of
Australian
 families
consume
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that consume
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energy
 for several appliances and the greenhouse
gas
 emissions
result
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that result
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 from
this
energy
use
.
Overall
, it can be
cearly
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clearly
 seen that
Australian
 households
use
 the most
energy
 for heating and
water
 heating, and the highest
greenhoouse
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greenhouse
 effect from
the
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apply
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energy
 usage is
water
 heating. Looking at the information in more detail, 42% and 30%
energy
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of energy
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used
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were used
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 for heating and
water
 heating respectively. These usages contribute to the highest greenhouse
gas
emission
 with 32% of
gas
emission
Fix the agreement mistake
emissions
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 from
water
 heating,
while
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and
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 15% from heating.
At
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With
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 regards to
the
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apply
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refrigerator usage, it
ccontribtes
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contributes
 to
doubled
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double
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emission
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emissions
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 where 7%
Australian
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of Australian
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 families consume
energy
 for
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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 and 14% produce
gas
emission
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emissions
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 from
this
energy
use
.
The
Correct article usage
A
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 small proportion of
Australian
 households used
energy
 for cooling and lighting at only 2% and 4% respectively and these figures
also
 contribute to 3% and 8% of
gas
 emissions. 15% of
Austalian
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Australia
use
energy
 for other appliances and
this
 usage
release
Correct subject-verb agreement
releases
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 28% of
gas
 emissions.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australian, energy, gas, use, water, emission with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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