You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
The line graph shows the
amount
of Change the quantifier
number
people
participating in basketball, tennis
, badminton and rugby
from 1985 and 2005 in a specific region.
Starting at about 250 people
in 1985, rugby
initially
indicated a slight decline as tennis
gradually increased. In 1995 rugby
started to fall rapidly while
tennis
continued to grow having
more than 200 Change the verb form
to have
people
participating in it by the end of 2005, almost four times as much
Correct quantifier usage
many
than
Change preposition
as
people
playing rugby
. During this
period badminton participants stayed Change preposition
at aproximately
aproximately
50 with a slight Correct your spelling
approximately
flunctuation
in 1990. Correct your spelling
fluctuation
Meanwhile
Add a comma
,Meanwhile
people
taking part in basketball stayed just
under 100 with a small drop in 1990 and a rise in 1995, since Change preposition
at just
then
there has been a steady decrease making the amount of participant
in 1985 and 2005 equivalent.
In conclusion from 1985 to 2005 Fix the agreement mistake
participants
rugby
displayed an
downward trend as Change the article
a
tennis
soared. Basketball and badminton stayed about at about the same rate with small
Correct article usage
a small
flunctuation
in 1990.Correct your spelling
fluctuation
fluctuations
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, tennis, rugby with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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