You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task.

The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.

Writing Task 1
The line graph shows the
amount
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number
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of
people
participating in basketball,
tennis
, badminton and
rugby
from 1985 and 2005 in a specific region. Starting at about 250
people
in 1985,
rugby
initially
indicated a slight decline as
tennis
gradually increased. In 1995
rugby
started to fall rapidly
while
tennis
continued to grow
having
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to have
show examples
more than 200
people
participating in it by the end of 2005, almost four times as
much
Correct quantifier usage
many
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than
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as
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people
playing
rugby
. During
this
period badminton participants stayed
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at aproximately
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aproximately
Correct your spelling
approximately
50 with a slight
flunctuation
Correct your spelling
fluctuation
in 1990.
Meanwhile
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,Meanwhile
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people
taking part in basketball stayed
just
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at just
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under 100 with a small drop in 1990 and a rise in 1995, since
then
there has been a steady decrease making the amount of
participant
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participants
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in 1985 and 2005 equivalent. In conclusion from 1985 to 2005
rugby
displayed
an
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a
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downward trend as
tennis
soared. Basketball and badminton stayed about at about the same rate with
small
Correct article usage
a small
show examples
flunctuation
Correct your spelling
fluctuation
fluctuations
in 1990.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, tennis, rugby with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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