You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph shows the number of people taking parts in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

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The line graph shows the

amount

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number

show examples

people

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participating in basketball,

tennis

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, badminton and

rugby

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from 1985 and 2005 in a specific region. Starting at about 250

people

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in 1985,

rugby

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initially

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indicated a slight decline as

tennis

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gradually increased. In 1995

rugby

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started to fall rapidly

while

Linking Words

tennis

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continued to grow

having

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to have

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more than 200

people

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participating in it by the end of 2005, almost four times as

much

Correct quantifier usage

many

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than

Change preposition

show examples

people

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playing

rugby

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. During

this

Linking Words

period badminton participants stayed

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at aproximately

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aproximately

Correct your spelling

approximately

50 with a slight

flunctuation

Correct your spelling

fluctuation

in 1990.

Meanwhile

Add a comma

,Meanwhile

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people

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taking part in basketball stayed

just

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at just

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under 100 with a small drop in 1990 and a rise in 1995, since

then

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there has been a steady decrease making the amount of

participant

Fix the agreement mistake

participants

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in 1985 and 2005 equivalent. In conclusion from 1985 to 2005

rugby

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displayed

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downward trend as

tennis

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soared. Basketball and badminton stayed about at about the same rate with

small

Correct article usage

a small

show examples

flunctuation

Correct your spelling

fluctuation

fluctuations

in 1990.

Submitted by adelsot2005 on Sun Jul 30 2023

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, tennis, rugby with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.

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4
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

156 words

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