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Student should spend time working before begining thier university studies. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

#student #time #thier #university #studies
In today's modern society, many
students
 choose to spend time working before
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starting
 to study
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the
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university
. It has many advantages
doing
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this
. It is the opinion of
this
 writer that it is better to spend time working before
begining
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beginning
thier
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their
university
 study and
this
 essay will outline the reasons why. It is vital to understand that
students
 who decide to
wok
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work
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 in advance of
university
 education
helps
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 them to evolve their personal and professional skills.
For instance
, the
students
 who have occupations in a school as a teacher under
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intern
 programme,
they
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can learn some essential techniques which can be valuable to them in the time ahead when they begin working professionally.
This
 can be constructive for some organisations
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and
 the authorities' department where these
students
 work for them during
this
 training. In
this
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 it is not
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difficult
 to see why, working
in
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at
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juvenile
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the juvenile
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 age can add maturity
in
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 them. To
what
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illustrate, a student who
worksin
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works in
work in
 a company as an office staff will be paid by that corporation.
This
 pay can be functional for the student to manage
with
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their personal expenditure.
Besides
, they can study
budget controlling
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 skills and it will be efficient for these
students
. It should be self-evident that
on
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education and
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fathoming
 the subject aspect, it will achieve
students
' basic logic of some objects. By way of illustration, working in the
pathlogy
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pathology
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 may help them to clear their ideas in the Biology subject. Taking everything into account, it is my belief that career experience before studying in the
university
 will get
students'
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hands on
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 advanced skills and guide
to
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them to
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 secure some cash which help them to cover some bills, teach them
managing
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to manage
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 expenses and
holding
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 onto
it
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them
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.
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