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Some people think that the government's decision to close the land borders in order to boost local production is a great idea. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this decision? What alternative decisions could have been used to boost local production?

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The productivity of a country is one of the most important factors to maintain a good economic status.
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, with the advent of the liberalization of the market, the price of
products
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 changes a lot depending on the worldwide economy.
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this
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 reason, somebody believes that closing borders between
countries
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 could help to improve local production. In
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 essay, I will explain which are the advantages and disadvantages of
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 tendency and I will propose an alternative way of solving the problem. On one hand, the decision to close borders could affect positively the
quality
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 of final
products
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. As a matter of fact,
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 in the food market, fewer kilometres between producer and consumer means better
quality
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.
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, maintaining fruits and vegetables during transport between
countries
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 is possible using methods like freezing,
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 of bad
quality
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 of the final product.
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, the limitation between
countries
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 could involve a big waste of
products
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. Sometimes happens that the consumption of a country is not enough.
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this
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 reason, the product expires.
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, a lot of Italian regions are famous for the production of tomatoes.
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, the Italian market is too little to consume all the
products
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 resulting in a big waste. In conclusion,
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 focusing on agriculture production the closure of borders could improve the
quality
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 of goods, but it might
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 create a problem of waste. A good alternative politics could be to put a limit on the kilometres between
countries
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 that exchange goods in order to maintain the
quality
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 and avoid wasting.
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