The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in millions) of telephone calls in Finland, divided into three categories, from 1995 – 2004.
The bar chart shows data about the total
numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
minutes
of Finland's telephone calls, divided into three categories, local - landline
, national and international - landline
,mobiles
, between 1995 and 2004.
Correct word choice
and mobiles
Overall
, the data indicates that telephone calls expenditures increase with year. Also
, local
- Correct article usage
the local
landline
was the hightest
of the three categories.
National and international - Correct your spelling
highest
landline
dramatically rise, from 6000 Fix the agreement mistake
landlines
million
minutes
in 1995 to over 10000 million
minutes
in 2004. Mobilies sharply increase, from nearly 0 million
minutes
in 1995 to nearly 10000 million
minutes
in 2004. From 1995 to 2001, Local-landline
also
increased over
4000 Change preposition
by over
million
minutes
but it keeps decreasing in the next three years.Submitted by yeshomeclass on
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