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The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used in an average English home. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph represents the
electricity
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 required for
electricity
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 in England during general days in winter and summer. The pie chart demonstrates what
electricity
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 is used for in the average English household.
Overall
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, the demand for
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 in winter is huge,
while
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 that in summer is a small number. Most of the
electricity
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 is used for heating rooms and water. In winter, the required
electricity
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 starts at 35000
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,
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 it fluctuates slightly to approximately 30000
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 at 6
o’clock
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 in the morning. Surprisingly, it continues to increase enormously to 40000
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 at 6
o’clock
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 in the evening. After that, the demand rose extremely to the peak at almost 50000
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 at 10
o’clock
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 at night. Unbelievable,
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, it drops to 35000
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 at midnight. In summer, the
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 required starts at a small rate, accounting for about 16000
units
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. It does not change a lot until 9
o’clock
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 in the morning. The demand slightly increased to 20000
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 at 1
o’clock
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 in the afternoon.
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, it decreased slightly, but it is still at the same rate at 10
o’clock
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 at night. After that, it dropped to 16000
units
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, which is the same rate at first. Most of the
electricity
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 is used for heating rooms and water, accounting for 52.5 per cent. The number of
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 used for ovens, kettles washing machines is 17.5 per cent. The percentage of
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 used for lighting and vacuum cleaners is the same figure, accounting for 15 per cent.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, units, o’clock with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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