The pie charts below show information on the highest level of education of women in Someland in 1945 and 1995.
The pie charts compare the highest level of education of females in a particular region in 1945 with that of 1995. The levels are given as percentages.
Generally speaking, numerous women in 1945 did not go to school
as well as
graduated in the third grade while
in 1995 the majority of them graduated with a first degree.
As is given in the illustrations, in 1945, over a third of them did not go to school as equal as graduated in the third grade. While
females who finished year
6 and year
9 accounted for a quarter, 15% and 10 respectively. However
, merely 1% of women achieved a bachelor's degree and none of them reached a postgraduate.
Half a century later, half of them, which constituted the highest ratio, succeed in their first degree. In comparison, it significantly increased by almost 49%, from 1% to 50%. Moreover
, the second-tenth achieved postgraduate as well as
those who graduated in year
12. The lowest education level in this
era was year
9, accounting for 10%, perhaps the changes in women's restrictions.Submitted by kadtp15 on
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