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The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002.

The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the UK in 2002.
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 pie chart gives the percentages of households who lived in the poor area of the UK in various types in 2002. Generally speaking, the majority of residents were widow parents and singles who did not have
children
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 the minority were sole parents and aged
couples
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. As is given illustration, half of the population in
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 area were single with no offspring and lone parents, accounting for 24% and 26% respectively. The majority of them chose to live without a spouse.
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,
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 living
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 their
children
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 amounted to 15%, followed by
people
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 who lived in all households with 14%. A third of them lived with their family.
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, the minority of them were
people
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 with no
children
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. including single-aged
people
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, aged
couples
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 and
couples
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 without
children
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, calculated to 7%, 5%, and 9% orderly. In comparison,
people
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 who live with offspring were more than those who live without offspring by 36%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, couples, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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