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Many students are studying abroad as part of their degree programme. What are the advantages and disadvantages

#students #part #programme
Nowadays, It is
getting
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becoming
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 popular that
study
 for a semester in foreign
countries
 as an international student to build a better profile in their
carrier
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career
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whereas
 many
students
 are going abroad for studies in between degrees. I am going to discuss the positives and negatives of studying in cross
countries
. There are quite a lot of advantages in
this
 scenario for the individual.
Firstly
, pursuing a semester in an international university gives better opportunities
in building
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one
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a
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 career in society. Coming the positive, they can have a better knowledge about the institutes and their course structures of other
countries
whereas
 very helpful for
students
 who want to pursue their higher studies in international organizations.
Secondly
, they come to know the culture and customs of the country.
For example
, most universities are accepting overseas
students
 to
study
 on their campuses for a semester.
In contrast
, going abroad in between undergraduate program
study
 tends to
spend
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cost
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 a
big
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large
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 amount as the universities will not provide any scholarships or incentives to
students
 who
came
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come
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 from other
countries
.
Moreover
, there is a problem in coping with
students
 as they will be more
advance
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advanced
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 in different types of skills like designing, analyzing problems and so on.
For instance
, some of the
students
 who went from India to
study
 abroad faced fewer problems in competing with them. In conclusion, people who are going to abroad
for studying
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study
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 as a part of their degree program have some positives and negatives. There are quite a lot of advantages like gaining better knowledge of universities and their curriculums and
also
 their culture.
On the other hand
, the idea of studying in
this
 way tends to spend a huge amount. These all depend on people who want to
study
 like that in other
countries
.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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