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Some people feel that governements should take a large proportion of people’s salaries to pay for necessary public services such as roads and schools .Others feel that high taxes are a bad thing. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A great number of individuals hold the view that a major portion of people’s
earning
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 should be taken for community services like schools and roads ,
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 others assume that
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 a bad idea. In my point of view , high
taxes
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 in undeveloped countries could be a nightmare for citizens. On the one hand, it is commonly understood that high taxing is a kind of support
country
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 economy. People , who support
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 point care about life welfare for themselves and their children , which
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 they just want to live in better conditions.
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, parents would like their children educated in a school of high range and
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 they want to drive on the roads with good quality to have easy commit.
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, some consent that the state enforces a high amount of
taxes
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.
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, some believe that
high
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a high
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 ratio of
taxes
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 is an awful idea. Their opinion might
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with
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 two main reasons .
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, these humans think that the public facility has to be sponsored by big public factories or companies which have broad income
annualy
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annually
. To illustrate, the oil and gas factory
earn
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 significant outcomes by selling these products to
foreign
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 and some of
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 amount could use for public facility providers.
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, in underdeveloped countries, high
taxes
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 may lead to the strongest demotivation of people . In
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case
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 will mostly suffer
individs
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individuals
 with medium and low income.
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,citizens try to find a way out
avoiding
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taxes
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 and
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 , it really gives a negative impact on the
country
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country's
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 economy in
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 run.
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,
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 tax revenues are directly supporting the economy in one way , it should be considered whether
locals
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 of the country are capable or not.It means that
taxes
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 should be depended on the national economic situation of a given locality.
On
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 my view, high taxing should not be taken
all
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from all
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 humans’ earnings. If the
governement
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government
 really needs financial support, it should tax much higher those who earn a lot.
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