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The line graph below gives information about the life expectancy of people from Asian
regions
 from 1950 and
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estimated
 prediction until 2030.
Overall
, the population of people is predicted to rise in all the
regions
 from 1950 to 2300. The highest number of elderly people was in Western
Asia
, which will continue to remain the highest until 2300,
while
 the lowest proportion can be seen in other South-central
Asia
 throughout the period. In terms of
period
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 between 1950 and 2000, there was
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rapid growth in all the
regions
.
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, in the
beginning
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 the average life expectancy accounted for 50, but
then
 in
2000
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 it represented 70.
However
, from 2000 to 2050 is estimated that the figure increase will not as fast as in the
last
 50 years. Other Eastern
Asia
 had the highest life expectancy at around 85;
neverthless
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, other
regions
 had less than 75. With regard to the
remaing
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remaining
 period from 2050 to 2300, it is
espected
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expected
 that the lifespan will increase by 20 and more in all the
regions
. The number is forecast to reach 100 in Western
Asia
, 95 in China and 90 in South-eastern
Asia
. The other
regions
 will have relatively little difference, and their medium will make up 85.
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