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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevan
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The line chart provides information about the
number
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 of
shop
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 closures and openings between 2011 and 2018.  It is clear from the chart that
shop
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 openings were the highest
number
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 in 2011 around 8500 and
shop
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 closures were the lowest
number
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 in 2015 by about 500.In general,the rate of numbers of both shops steadily levelled out in 2014 by about 4000 to 4100. 
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,
shop
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 openings suddenly decreased from 2011 to 2012 with about 4500 shops.
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, it steadily increased from 4000 to 6100 from 2012 to 2014. What is more, it was not changed from 2015 to 2017,
while
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 it sharply went down in 2018 to 3000. Looking at the chart for more detail, the rate of the
number
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 of closures shops changed from 2011 to 2018. From 2014 to 2015 , it sharply declined from 6600 to 500.
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, it suddenly went up to 5050 in 2016. Added to that it slowly rise from 2016 to 2018.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, shop with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "went down" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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