pie charts show the online sales for retail in 4 different sectors in 2003 and 2013 in New Zealand.

The pie charts show the online sales for retail in 4 different sectors in 2003 and 2013 in New Zealand. The shared information of pie charts showed the percentages of each sector’s

transactions

in two different years,

while

the highest

transactions

recorded in 2003 for travel, and the lowest for books in comparison to 2013 with the highest record was for film/music and the lowest for clothes. In 2003 travel reached the peak for

this

and the other year as well, which recorded a

percentage

of 36 %, film recorded at 21%, clothes at 24%, and the lowest

percentage

for the year 2003 was for books at 19%.

On the other hand

, by the year 2013, the percentages had changed totally,

while

some

transactions

decreased, there are some others that had increased vividly, which film/music recorded the highest number of

transactions

with the

percentage

of 33%, 29% for travel, 22% books and the lowest

percentage

recorded in both different years was for the clothes in 2013 with a

percentage

of 16%.

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Comparative analysis
E-commerce
Retail sectors
Growth rate
Decade
Decline
Trends
Online transactions
Consumer behavior
Market share
Significant increase/decrease
Digital era
Accessibility
User-friendly platform
Market dynamics
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