The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010. Summarise the information by seleting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
two
maps display how road
access to a city hospital had changed by 2010 compared with 2007.
Overall
, there had not been many changes made, except two
new roundabouts, a new car park, and the replacement of the bus
stops with a bus
station.
Surrounding the hospital was Ring Road
, which was connected to City Road
by Hospital Road
. By 2010, two
roundabouts had been added, at the junctions of Hospital Road
and City Road
respectively.
There was a car park for staff and the public on the southeast side of Ring Road
in 2007. However
, by 2010, it had become a staff-only car park, and a new public one had been built on the east side of this
road
.
Furthermore
, the bus
stops on both sides of Hospital Road
had been replaced by a large bus
station with direct access to the two
roundabouts.Submitted by mohammadmgh1381 on
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