Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a jobb straight after shcool. Discuss both views.

Academic success is the most efficient way to guarantee your future job.
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the
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university degree
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related to your future career. In
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will discuss both points
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. Universities are affording knowledge
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the way of thinking in humans.
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involve mental improvement and
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wider in thinking. Life expenses are a
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