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People who start a university course but do not complete it should be fined. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #university #course
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seeking
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 university
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 opportunity
whereas
other
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others
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 have taken their
palces
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places
. Even though
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there are many people
believe
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who believe
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 that university students that did not complete their courses should have
chances
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, I believe that giving a chance to
other student
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in
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is
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 the right
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choice
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both points
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of
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evidences
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evidence
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. Negative people are publishing bad educational environment. In fact, universities are needing to have supportive academic weather in the classes as those who
wasting
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 their time without serious learning behaviour are
effecting
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affecting
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the
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others.
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, If an
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excellence
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 student were added to
group
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, he will make
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 peers work
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 to be
in
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 the same level,
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so that
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others
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perfformance
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performance
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