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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
#show #percentage #water #purposes #six #areas #world
The charts indicate
to
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Five places on the earth. Talking about
water
 and the ways. of using it. It seen obvious all of
pie
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the pie
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 charts have the got
the
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Lowest
precentage
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percentage
in
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for
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the
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domestic
uses
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use
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 like at home.
However
, the Largest
precentage
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percentage
 went
with
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to
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the
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Agricultural and farms. The
center
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centre
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 of
Asia
 has the greatest numbers of
precentage
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percentage
 of Agricultural
use
.
On the other hand
 in
Europe
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,Europe
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 they did not
use
,
water
so
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as
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 much as
central
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Central
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Asia
 or Africa. They just
use
 32,4%. But in the
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industry
industral
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,industral
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 they
use
 it
alot
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a lot
 and the Largest
precentage
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percentage
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is with
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with
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of
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 them. If we check on Africa, it
seen
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 they
almost
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are almost
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 the second after
Asia
use
water
 in industrial and opposite of
Europe
. In North America and
Europe
 they
slightly
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are slightly
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same
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the same
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 in industrial
use
 and just less 4
precentages
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percentages
percentage
to
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of
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Europe
, South
Asia
 and South America are uses
the
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water
 in
Agriculturat
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Agricultural
Agriculture
 rather than industrial.
Overall
, they all
use
water
 much
in
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on
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 the farm and Agricultural.
Europe
 and North America
they
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use
water
 more than others in the industrial areas. Africa got the lowest
precentage
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percentage
 in domestic and industrial uses.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, precentage, asia, use, europe with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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