Countries are becoming mor and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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revolutionized life and similarities are growing among countries since it is no longer an issue to have access to the same
products
from all over the world.
While
there are some drawbacks associated with the availability of all
products
from every part of the globe, I believe the main benefits are more substantial. On one hand, a potential disadvantage of
this
accessibility may be losing the identity and culture in
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long run.
Globalization
of
products
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a concern about the regional customs as these global
products
excessively influence a country.
For instance
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cloths
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industry, most
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and local clothes are become vanishing these days since
people
tend to purchase designer clothes from
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different
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of the world. Another perceived negative
point
is that despite the hard efforts of workers, many small
manufactures
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are going to bankrupt. Owing to globalized
products
,
local
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produced
products
have not been
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.
Therefore
, small companies find it difficult to provide their employees with their
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, which leads to a slight increase in
unemployment
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rate.
On the other hand
, a primary advantage of vanishing commercial limitations between countries is that
people
have access to the
state of the art
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advancements. There was an improvement rift between the advanced and the third world countries which was not fair and
globalization
gives
people
a hand in many approaches. Medical equipment can be a case
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this
point
.
As a result
of being deprived, many
people
from different areas used to suffer from a disease
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of equipment. A
further
positive
point
is that from an
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point
of view,
globalization
not only leads to
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a huge impact on making more profit
due to
exporting commodities, but
also
brings about more innovation and motivation so as to produce goods with a higher quality in a competitive market. On balance, it is true that
globalization
would seem disadvantageous under certain circumstances.
However
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positive effects in terms of having access to modern equipment and earning more profit override the disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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