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The given line graph compares the amount of food eaten by Chinese consumers from 1985 to 2010.

The given line graph compares the amount of food eaten by Chinese consumers from 1985 to 2010.
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The given line graph compares the amount of food eaten by
Chinese
 consumers from 1985 to 2010.
Overall
,during
this
twenty five-year
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period
,
fish
 was
most
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the most
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 popular item among
Chinese
 people among the given three items.
Also
,
while
this
period
 consumption of meat gradually fell
the
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to the
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 same level as the
concumption
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consumption
 of salt. In 1985, nearly 500 grams of
fish
 was consumed in China,
while
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the amout
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amout
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amount
 of meat consumed weekly
sarted
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started
 going
dowm
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down
 and in 2010 only around 200
grames
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grammes
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 of meat was eaten by
Chinese
 people.Until 1995,
fish
 sales did not increase by 580 grames, but after
the
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1995 the
consumtion
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consumption
 of
fish
 increased to 850 grames. As we can see,
it is clear that
fish
 was the most popular food in China during the
period
 shown.
The
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In the
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 time
period
 between 1985 to 2010 only
the
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one of
item
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an item
the item
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 of
tree
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three
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 items was levelled
of
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off
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 and salt
had
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less attracted
by
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Chinese
 people.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chinese, period, fish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "amount" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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