Fossil fuels are essential for producing electricity, powering industry and fueling transportation. However, one day we will reach a point when all the world’s fossil fuels have been depleted. How can we conserve these resources? What are some alternatives to fossil fuels?

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Fossil fuels play an important role in providing the power and

energy

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to the industries.

Due to

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the excessive use of fuels, one day the resources will meet depletion.

This

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passage describes the ways

for using

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to use

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energy

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from alternative sources in order to protect them. One of the main uses is oil and gas by the transportation industry.

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, vehicles utilized a

big

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large

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amount of petrol, diesel, and gas.

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, there is a need to apply restrictions so that the usage

could

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can

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be controlled.

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, a strategy has been applied by the government of India that has encouraged humans to travel via public transport.

Furthermore

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, the residents of Pakistan have

also

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taken the initiative and started carpooling.

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apply

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which

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apply

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money, oil, and pollution

has

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have

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been controlled.

On the other hand

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, there is another issue of

energy

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consumption.

The industries

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Industries

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like clothing, steel, and raw

material

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materials

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take up a large amount of electricity to boost their power.

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the

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apply

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alternatives like solar and wind

energy

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could be utilized. The areas of internal Sindh of Karachi, Pakistan contain huge empty spaces which could be used for implementing and capturing natural

energy

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, the passage provided alternatives for fossil fuels. These would be beneficial in saving and stopping them

to become

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instinctive.

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coherence cohesion

The essay lacks a clear introduction and conclusion. The points made in the body paragraphs are not well connected, leading to a lack of coherence and cohesion.

task achievement

The essay provides relevant ideas about conserving fossil fuels and mentions alternative energy sources. However, the response does not fully address the prompt, and specific examples are lacking.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

214 words

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Fossil fuels are essential for producing electricity, powering industry and fueling transportation. However, one day we will reach a point when all the world’s fossil fuels have been depleted. How can we conserve these resources? What are some alternatives to fossil fuels?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people say that all popular TV programs should aim to educate viewers about important social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

It is more important to spend public money on promoting a healthy lifestyle in order to prevent illness than to spend it on treatment of people who are already ill. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Student learn far more with their teachers than other sources (the Internet or television). To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some developed countries now have unemployment problems. Why do people still want to immigrate to these countries? Give reasons and specific examples to explain your answer.