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This diagram illustrates the 2 different ways of how electricity is being produced from sea waves. The process requires the construction of a large chamber connected to a column with a turbine

This diagram illustrates the 2 different ways of how electricity is being produced from sea waves. The process requires the construction of a large chamber connected to a column with a turbine
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 diagram illustrates the 2 different ways
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how
electricity
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 is being produced from
sea
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 waves. The process requires the construction of a large
chamber
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 connected to a column with a turbine. A
chamber
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 should be located on top o a cliff or
sea
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 wall
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 because the illustration shows the production of
electricity
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 from the
sea
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. It is obvious that there are two ways
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 when the
wave
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 goes forward to the cliff and back. Eventually, when the
wave
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 makes any movement, it stimulates the
air
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,
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 and goes in the same direction as water
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. But the key part is that it is most likely the same structure. First of all , it all begins when a
wave
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 comes to a
chamber
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, so it means that water is going towards the
sea
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 wall. In order to
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, the
air
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 does similar movements , as an effect of
competion
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 with the pressure,that has been made by
wave
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 flow in the
chamber
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.
Secondly
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, the
air
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 goes to the column and stimulates the turbines to spin. It is obviously seen that
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 of turbines
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makes
electricity
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. It is a totally identical process when the
wave
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 moves
backward
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,despite the
air
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 going in ,
therefore
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 making the turbine spin. It is interesting to note that it is possible to generate
electricity
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 from the
sea
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 waves.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, sea, chamber, wave, air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 7 times.
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