This diagram illustrates the 2 different ways of how electricity is being produced from sea waves. The process requires the construction of a large chamber connected to a column with a turbine

This diagram illustrates the 2 different ways of how electricity is being produced from sea waves. 

The process requires the construction of a large chamber connected to a column with a turbine
This
diagram illustrates the 2 different ways
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how
electricity
is being produced from
sea
waves. The process requires the construction of a large
chamber
connected to a column with a turbine. A
chamber
should be located on top o a cliff or
sea
wall
,
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because the illustration shows the production of
electricity
from the
sea
. It is obvious that there are two ways
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when the
wave
goes forward to the cliff and back. Eventually, when the
wave
makes any movement, it stimulates the
air
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and goes in the same direction as water
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. But the key part is that it is most likely the same structure. First of all , it all begins when a
wave
comes to a
chamber
, so it means that water is going towards the
sea
wall. In order to
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, the
air
does similar movements , as an effect of
competion
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competition
with the pressure,that has been made by
wave
flow in the
chamber
.
Secondly
, the
air
goes to the column and stimulates the turbines to spin. It is obviously seen that
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of turbines
,
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makes
electricity
. It is a totally identical process when the
wave
moves
backward
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,despite the
air
going in ,
therefore
making the turbine spin. It is interesting to note that it is possible to generate
electricity
from the
sea
waves.
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