The diagram bellow shows the proses by which bricks are manufactured for building industry.

The diagram bellow shows the proses by which bricks are manufactured for building industry.
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The Diagram shows how
bricks
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are created in a factory. Altogether there are 7 steps.
The first step is
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that the clay is
dugged
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drugged
and
is
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apply
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brought to the manufactory.
Second
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The second
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step is the clay was put on top of the metal grid where it is later
then
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placed on the roller and
is
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apply
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filtered. After that, the sand and water are either put inside a mould or are put inside the wire cutter and
are
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apply
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cut into smaller
bricks
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. those
bricks
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or moulds are put inside a drying oven to dry for one to two days. After one-two
days
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day
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, the dried
bricks
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is
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are
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brought to a moderate
kiln
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that is
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set for 200-980 degree
celcius
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celsius
. After
is place
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is placed
is placing
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at a moderate
kiln
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it
is move
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is moved
is moving
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to a higher
kiln
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of 870-1000
degree
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degrees
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celius
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celsius
. after being in the
kiln
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, it is
store
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stored
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in a cooling chamber for two-three days. once the
bricked
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bricks
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are cool they are packed and
is send
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is sent
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for delivery in a delivery van.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, kiln with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "moderate" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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