The diagram bellow shows the proses by which bricks are manufactured for building industry.
The Diagram shows how
bricks
are created in a factory. Altogether there are 7 steps.
Use synonyms
The first step is
that the clay is Linking Words
dugged
and Correct your spelling
drugged
is
brought to the manufactory. Unnecessary verb
apply
Second
step is the clay was put on top of the metal grid where it is later Change the article
The second
then
placed on the roller and Linking Words
is
filtered. After that, the sand and water are either put inside a mould or are put inside the wire cutter and Unnecessary verb
apply
are
cut into smaller Unnecessary verb
apply
bricks
. those Use synonyms
bricks
or moulds are put inside a drying oven to dry for one to two days.
After one-two Use synonyms
days
, the dried Fix the agreement mistake
day
bricks
Use synonyms
is
brought to a moderate Change the verb form
are
kiln
Use synonyms
that is
set for 200-980 degree Linking Words
celcius
. After Correct your spelling
celsius
is place
at a moderate Change the verb form
is placed
is placing
kiln
it Use synonyms
is move
to a higher Change the verb form
is moved
is moving
kiln
of 870-1000 Use synonyms
degree
Fix the agreement mistake
degrees
celius
. after being in the Correct your spelling
celsius
kiln
, it is Use synonyms
store
in a cooling chamber for two-three days.
once the Wrong verb form
stored
bricked
are cool they are packed and Replace the word
bricks
is send
for delivery in a delivery van.Change the verb form
is sent
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