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some people believe that studying at universityor college is the best route to a suceesful career, while others believe that it is better to get job straight after gruaduating from high school. Disscuss both view and give your opinion. '

#people #universityor #college #route #suceesful #career #job #school #disscuss
Some
people
 choose to study higher education after studying at high school,
while
 others prefer
having
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job
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.
Although
 both decisions have
its
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their
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 own benefit, I personally
belevieve
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believe
 that applying
for
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to
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 university will have more advantages for students. On
one
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 hand, universities and colleges can bring more
job
 opportunities to employers, especially for young
people
. As they will gain advantaged degrees and well qualifications,
also
 they are prepared
to
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job
 skills after graduating, which will lead to students will find
job
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jobs
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 easier and high
salary
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salaries
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 in good businesses.
Besides
, it contributes to developing
knowledge
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the knowledge
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 of dwellers. The improvement of
people
's intellect will construct
civilized
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 society and living standards ,
moreover
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 it can promote the development of the country's economy.
On the other hand
, students getting a straight
job
 will be more independent in life. They can practise themself to become more impatient and strengthen,
also
 their social and communication skill will
be evolve
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.
Besides
, they don't need to base their on their parents or family and they can afford to start their own family.
In addition
, young
people
 who decide to find work, rather than continue their studies, may progress more quickly. They will have the chance to gain real experience and learn practical skills related to their chosen profession.
This
 may lead to promotions and a successful career. In conclusion, there are convincing arguments for starting work straight after school, but higher education can
also
 lead to a successful career.
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