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The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising but not the real need of the society where such products are sold. Do you agree or disagree?

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The high sales of popular consumer goods reflect the power of advertising but not the real need of the society where
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products
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 are sold. I agree with
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 statement to a large extent. Advertising is a powerful tool that can be used to influence
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's buying decisions. Advertisers use a variety of techniques to create a sense of need or desire for their
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, even if those
products
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 are not essential.
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, they may use attractive models, celebrities, or music to create a positive association with the product. They may
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 use fear or scarcity tactics to make
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 feel like they need to buy the product now.
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 of advertising,
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 are often persuaded to buy
products
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 that they do not really need.
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 is especially true for
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 that are seen as status symbols or that are associated with a certain lifestyle.
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, many
people
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 buy expensive cars or designer clothes even though they could get by with less expensive alternatives. Of course, there are
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 some
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 that are genuinely needed by
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.
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,
people
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 need food, clothing, and shelter.
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, even these essential
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 are often advertised in ways that create a sense of need
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 not actually there.
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, advertisers may make
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 feel like they need to buy a new brand of cereal because it is "better for you" or that they need to buy a new type of shampoo because it will make their hair "look amazing." In conclusion, I believe that the high sales of popular consumer goods do reflect the power of advertising, but not necessarily the real needs of society. Advertisers are very good at creating a sense of need for their
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, even if those
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 are not essential.
As a result
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,
people
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 are often persuaded to buy things that they do not really need.
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