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The two diagrams describe the main parts of a hot air balloon and indicate how it works. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.

The two diagrams describe the main parts of a hot air balloon and indicate how it works. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons with relevant.
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The provided image illustrates the components and the working of a hot
air
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balloon
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.
Overall
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, the hot
all
Correct determiner usage
apply
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balloon
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 consists of 8 different parts cooperating to produce the weight difference between internal and external
air
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. The first image displays the ascending hot
air
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balloon
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. There is a gas cylinder tank at the bottom of the
balloon
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 which is put above a basket for the passengers to sit or stand. When the burners
ignites
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ignite
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, chemicals will be burned and hot
air
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 will be trapped inside
of
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apply
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the
balloon
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 envelope. As the hot
air
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 inside the
balloon
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 is lighter, it will drive the
balloon
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 up
while
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 the cool
air
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 outside
weights
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weighs
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 down. There is a valve at the top of the envelope which is closed when the
balloon
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 is rising up. The cord of the valve is in the hand of the passengers and allows the pilot to control the flight. The second image shows the descending hot
air
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balloon
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.
To begin
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 a descent, the pilot will switch off the burner and pull the cord to open the valve on the top and let out the heating
air
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. All
this
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 process
help
Correct subject-verb agreement
helps
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 the
air
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 become cooled and heavier, pulling the hot
air
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balloon
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 downward.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, balloon with synonyms.
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