The graph shows the amount of money spennt on books in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.

The graph shows the amount of money spennt on books in Germany , France , Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005.
The line graph provides detail of the number of
money
which was used in the
books
of 4 countries from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
, it can be seen that the amount of
money
consumed on
books
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of 4 countries all increased , but only Austria has a big change. Germany, France and Italy have only a small change . Looking at the figures in
futher
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further
detail , Germany had the highest start with 80
millions
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dollars
. In the following years , it rose and fell again . But in 2003 , it increased rapidly and reach a peak of nearly 95
millions
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dollars
. Next , Austria is the starting country with the lowest spending on
books
of 30
millions
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dollars
. From 1995 to 2001 , it increased slightly . But for the rest of the year, Austria increased by nearly 30
millions
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dollars
and stopped at 71
millions
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dollars
. Turning to the
remaing
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remaining
statistics , France
to account
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for nearly 55
millions
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dollars
. it went up steadily and stopped near 73
millions
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dollars
. But that was enough for France to be second in spent
money
in
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on
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books
.
Finally
, Italy spent 50 on
books
in 1995. In the following years , the amount of
money
Italy spent on
books
increased slowly . That made Italy the country that spent the least
money
on
books
in 2005.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words money, books, millions, dollars with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 3 times.

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  • expenditure
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • peak
  • surge
  • decline
  • fluctuate
  • steady
  • comparison
  • significant change
  • spending patterns
  • economic conditions
  • cultural factors
  • cross-country comparison
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